NAMES!

'Ello. Sorry I havn't posted for so long. Didn't have the time 'cause BEN LETTIN' ME MAKE MY OWN GAME! I've been so excited. Anyway, Ben says the Random Story needs a few more things. Here is his exact words:

I think you should start revising your story, now that you've laid down plenty of it. Here are some tips for your revision:
1. Start a new paragraph when a new character starts talking. It keeps dialogue clear. It's also an official Rule of English, so you have to do it anyway.
2. Introduce your characters one at a time, and give the reader time to get to know them before throwing even more characters at them.
3. Try to avoid being overly silly.
4. Think of a real title, and make the story a little less random.5. Every sentence should do one of two things: advance the story or show character.
6. Make sure your characters ALL have distinct personalities; even if you have a great lead cast, a bunch of nobodies sitting in the back can muck up the story.
7. Try to always clearly establish when you change settings, including the time or the location.
8. Always read back through what you've written, and fix mistakes and inconsistencies.
9. Don't worry about the length of your story; quality over quantity.
10. Have fun. If you're not having fun writing it, no one will have fun reading it either.
11. Always know what's going to happen. Follow an outline so you never end up having to cast around for something to happen next. Make sure you have a clear beginning, middle, and ending in mind.
Start a new revision with those tips in mind. Post sections as you complete them, and I might actually read it this time.

Well, whaddya think'a that? The thing I'm gonna focus on the Name first. But, my brain is blank. Give me some ideas on the comments. Also, I think I'm gonna cut the nicknames. Some of then will stay, like maybe Fang, and Anime.(Anime might come IIVU) Anyway, tell meh what'cha think.